I like your idea for your storybook. I did have to read your introduction twice to really grasp where the introduction was going. However, I do like how you made the setting to where the characters came together to reflect on they glory days. I can definitely see where you are going with your storybook. I can see you having them reflect on each of they glory moments within the stories that you retell. I think you should think out some of the back and forth dialogue in the introduction though. I am looking forward to reading your stories.
Hi Raven! Your introduction is so much fun to read! I love that it is a story itself; it made it really enjoyable. I recognized a few of the tricksters in your story, probably from the same places as everyone else. I appreciated that your author's note introduced me to the characters I was not familiar with and gave me a bit more background on the ones I had heard of. I thought it was an interesting idea to have different characters from across several different backgrounds all together. For your storybook, are you going to be solely focusing on stories of how different tricksters stole fire or will you be including other stories as well? I liked how you included a small glimpse into different tricks each of them had done, such as Hermes stealing Apollo's cows and Maui turning his brother-in-law into a dog, but I wasn't sure if you are going to revisit these stories again later. I thought they sounded interesting and would have liked to have heard more about them! I laughed at your Zeus comment because just earlier today, I watched an SNL skit about Greek gods and they poked fun at Zeus's promiscuous behavior.
Hey Raven! I love the visuals that you created throughout the story. I especially love how Puck is throwing the sugar packets. I wonder if any of the other gods were noticing this, or if some of them like Hermes and Lugh were so engrossed in their discussion that they had no idea that Puck was even doing this. With how engrossed they are in it, I would imagine they don't. I really enjoyed reading about all of the different gods you mentioned, since I had not heard of many of them, nor had I realized that nearly every single culture had their own distinct set of gods. You did a fantastic job creating this conference of the tricksters! What brought them all together? Is this a regular meeting that they have, or was it an unexpected event that led to this? I can't want to read Crow's story and see how it turns out!
Hey there Raven! After the first paragraph I immediately got excited because I realized you were writing about the trickster gods. I think it's especially neat that you included Maui and Loki who are both in modern popular movies but also bought in Hermes and Puck. I wonder if they’re all trickster gods, does that mean they all get along well because they can relate to each other or will there be some serious fights and pranks? There’s a lot of trickster gods here so I kinda got overwhelmed with all the different characters. Will you let each one have their moment or only focus on a few main ones? I think you could also just shorten your title to How to Steal Fire because it’s snippy and also catches your attention. This should be a really cool story and I’m definitely gonna wanna see the finished product! Great work!
Hi Raven! I enjoyed your idea of creating a story line that involved pitting different tricksters of different cultures together! I love reading about this character type in different cultures and I think you did a great job of showing their dynamics with each other and adding in their own personal flair to each of their interactions. I never realized that each of these different character have their own "stealing-fire" story. I think that's a great way to demonstrate how even though these characters come from different cultures they're all really similar at their core. I really had a hard time thinking of suggestions for your story. All of your dialogue seems to follow really well even when you use a different voice for each character. While I think the stories of each trickster will be very interesting in themselves, perhaps you could write in cameos from other characters from their story lines that ruin their story or pick on them while they tell a story. I think it would keep the plot light-hearted to have some characters picking on a "trickster". I've only heard the story of Maui stealing fire so I'll be looking forward to reading about the others!
Awesome introduction! I really liked the way you incorporated all of the different gods and mythologies. I never would have thought of that and it was a very interesting idea to read! It's crazy that each "brand" of mythology has their own stories that transcend across cultures. I also like the idea of these different mythological gods coming together to share stories of "the good ol' days." It will be cool to see how the gods interact with each other and how you incorporate their personalities into your stories.
I'm really interested in seeing how each of these stories turn out. Do you plan on using a very closely replicated version of each of their "stealing fire" story? Or will you create new and fresh ways for them to tell their story? I am looking forward to seeing how your story book turns out and what direction you decide to take for you future stories. An awesome concept and I can't wait to see what you accomplish with it!
Hi Raven! I love your introduction and I am excited to see where you take the god's stories! I wonder how they will interact throughout your project, if anyone will get into fights or if everyone will get along. I have to admit I am not familiar with many of the characters you mentioned in your introduction, except Hermes. Your author's note really helped me with understanding who these characters are and how they originated! I would suggest including a little more detail about each character throughout your stories based on who is telling their story of how they stole fire. That would help readers connect with the god you are talking about. Will you tell original stories about each god or put your own spin on how each character stole fire? I am really anxious to see who everyone votes on at the end! I will definitely check back in to see the final results!
Hey Raven! I love the concept of your Storybook! It was so much fun to read! It reminded me a lot of that scene in Wreck-it-Ralph where all of the villains gathered together for a meeting. I love self-aware storytelling like that! I was just browsing through the Storybooks to find one to comment on when Hermes' line "Well I was in all ten Percy Jackson books!" stuck out to me. So funny! I would love to see what kind of shenanigans all of these characters get into together, so I hope you'll zoom out of your stories every now and then for us to see everyone interact. I also really like how you include tricksters from all over the world and from both mythology and folklore; it really makes it clear how ubiquitous the archetype is. My suggestion for your introduction is that you use a bit more description, especially in regard to how the characters look. You do a great job with describing their mannerisms and actions, but I don't have a clear image of them or the setting they're. Also, what if, instead of having the characters vote on the best story at the end, you find a way to embed a poll in the final story and let your readers decide whose was the best? That would be a neat and unique way to add interactivity to your site! I'm really excited to see where else you go with this! Keep up the good work!
I really enjoyed reading your introduction! When I read the title of your storybook, I wasn’t exactly sure of what to think. Once I read through all of it, I was able to make the clear connection. It was also nice to have such great dialogue within the story. It was fun to read it because the different personalities of the different characters began to appear. As an outsider, I do not know too much about the characters. Do you plan to incorporate this more into the stories? Or was it more just to distinguish the characters within the introduction? I think that it would be really great to give a little bit more of a description of the characters into the introduction. With this, the reader can picture the story in their head a little bit more. Your story was really great, so I am finding little things that I think could be improved. There really isn’t much that you need to change! I look forward to coming back later in the semester to see how the different characters stole fire!
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ReplyDeleteI like your idea for your storybook. I did have to read your introduction twice to really grasp where the introduction was going. However, I do like how you made the setting to where the characters came together to reflect on they glory days. I can definitely see where you are going with your storybook. I can see you having them reflect on each of they glory moments within the stories that you retell. I think you should think out some of the back and forth dialogue in the introduction though. I am looking forward to reading your stories.
Hi Raven! Your introduction is so much fun to read! I love that it is a story itself; it made it really enjoyable. I recognized a few of the tricksters in your story, probably from the same places as everyone else. I appreciated that your author's note introduced me to the characters I was not familiar with and gave me a bit more background on the ones I had heard of. I thought it was an interesting idea to have different characters from across several different backgrounds all together. For your storybook, are you going to be solely focusing on stories of how different tricksters stole fire or will you be including other stories as well? I liked how you included a small glimpse into different tricks each of them had done, such as Hermes stealing Apollo's cows and Maui turning his brother-in-law into a dog, but I wasn't sure if you are going to revisit these stories again later. I thought they sounded interesting and would have liked to have heard more about them! I laughed at your Zeus comment because just earlier today, I watched an SNL skit about Greek gods and they poked fun at Zeus's promiscuous behavior.
ReplyDeleteHey Raven! I love the visuals that you created throughout the story. I especially love how Puck is throwing the sugar packets. I wonder if any of the other gods were noticing this, or if some of them like Hermes and Lugh were so engrossed in their discussion that they had no idea that Puck was even doing this. With how engrossed they are in it, I would imagine they don't. I really enjoyed reading about all of the different gods you mentioned, since I had not heard of many of them, nor had I realized that nearly every single culture had their own distinct set of gods. You did a fantastic job creating this conference of the tricksters! What brought them all together? Is this a regular meeting that they have, or was it an unexpected event that led to this? I can't want to read Crow's story and see how it turns out!
ReplyDeleteHey there Raven! After the first paragraph I immediately got excited because I realized you were writing about the trickster gods. I think it's especially neat that you included Maui and Loki who are both in modern popular movies but also bought in Hermes and Puck. I wonder if they’re all trickster gods, does that mean they all get along well because they can relate to each other or will there be some serious fights and pranks? There’s a lot of trickster gods here so I kinda got overwhelmed with all the different characters. Will you let each one have their moment or only focus on a few main ones? I think you could also just shorten your title to How to Steal Fire because it’s snippy and also catches your attention. This should be a really cool story and I’m definitely gonna wanna see the finished product! Great work!
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ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your idea of creating a story line that involved pitting different tricksters of different cultures together! I love reading about this character type in different cultures and I think you did a great job of showing their dynamics with each other and adding in their own personal flair to each of their interactions. I never realized that each of these different character have their own "stealing-fire" story. I think that's a great way to demonstrate how even though these characters come from different cultures they're all really similar at their core.
I really had a hard time thinking of suggestions for your story. All of your dialogue seems to follow really well even when you use a different voice for each character. While I think the stories of each trickster will be very interesting in themselves, perhaps you could write in cameos from other characters from their story lines that ruin their story or pick on them while they tell a story. I think it would keep the plot light-hearted to have some characters picking on a "trickster".
I've only heard the story of Maui stealing fire so I'll be looking forward to reading about the others!
Awesome introduction! I really liked the way you incorporated all of the different gods and mythologies. I never would have thought of that and it was a very interesting idea to read! It's crazy that each "brand" of mythology has their own stories that transcend across cultures. I also like the idea of these different mythological gods coming together to share stories of "the good ol' days." It will be cool to see how the gods interact with each other and how you incorporate their personalities into your stories.
ReplyDeleteI'm really interested in seeing how each of these stories turn out. Do you plan on using a very closely replicated version of each of their "stealing fire" story? Or will you create new and fresh ways for them to tell their story? I am looking forward to seeing how your story book turns out and what direction you decide to take for you future stories. An awesome concept and I can't wait to see what you accomplish with it!
Hi Raven! I love your introduction and I am excited to see where you take the god's stories! I wonder how they will interact throughout your project, if anyone will get into fights or if everyone will get along. I have to admit I am not familiar with many of the characters you mentioned in your introduction, except Hermes. Your author's note really helped me with understanding who these characters are and how they originated! I would suggest including a little more detail about each character throughout your stories based on who is telling their story of how they stole fire. That would help readers connect with the god you are talking about. Will you tell original stories about each god or put your own spin on how each character stole fire? I am really anxious to see who everyone votes on at the end! I will definitely check back in to see the final results!
ReplyDeleteHey Raven! I love the concept of your Storybook! It was so much fun to read! It reminded me a lot of that scene in Wreck-it-Ralph where all of the villains gathered together for a meeting. I love self-aware storytelling like that! I was just browsing through the Storybooks to find one to comment on when Hermes' line "Well I was in all ten Percy Jackson books!" stuck out to me. So funny! I would love to see what kind of shenanigans all of these characters get into together, so I hope you'll zoom out of your stories every now and then for us to see everyone interact. I also really like how you include tricksters from all over the world and from both mythology and folklore; it really makes it clear how ubiquitous the archetype is.
ReplyDeleteMy suggestion for your introduction is that you use a bit more description, especially in regard to how the characters look. You do a great job with describing their mannerisms and actions, but I don't have a clear image of them or the setting they're. Also, what if, instead of having the characters vote on the best story at the end, you find a way to embed a poll in the final story and let your readers decide whose was the best? That would be a neat and unique way to add interactivity to your site! I'm really excited to see where else you go with this! Keep up the good work!
I really enjoyed reading your introduction! When I read the title of your storybook, I wasn’t exactly sure of what to think. Once I read through all of it, I was able to make the clear connection. It was also nice to have such great dialogue within the story. It was fun to read it because the different personalities of the different characters began to appear. As an outsider, I do not know too much about the characters. Do you plan to incorporate this more into the stories? Or was it more just to distinguish the characters within the introduction? I think that it would be really great to give a little bit more of a description of the characters into the introduction. With this, the reader can picture the story in their head a little bit more. Your story was really great, so I am finding little things that I think could be improved. There really isn’t much that you need to change! I look forward to coming back later in the semester to see how the different characters stole fire!
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